FROM BOOKWERM
Well, finally ready to put book up on Kindle and Create Space. This is one sentence in my acknowledgement. I thank several people and would like to include this. Can it be written more clearly or less awkwardly?
The many Starbucks baristas who, I have found in my frequent travels between Boston and Baltimore, are always ready with free coffee refills and are responsible for creating the welcome environment where a writer can work without suffering feelings of isolation.
RESPONSE
Sure...but also, I think a thank you might be better without "suffering" and "isolation" - plus maybe axe the travel part:
The many Starbucks baristas who readily bring me free coffee refills and create a welcoming environment where a writer can work in an atmosphere of comfort and camaraderie.