FROM DAISY

Lately, I've been dealing with my bad habit of using "that" in a lot of my sentences where it isn't necessary. Example:

He knew that she was going to be in a bad mood when she got home from work.

vs.

He knew she was going to be in a bad mood when she got home from work.

RESPONSE

"That" is usually a good word to eliminate, but I think it is not nearly so harmful to good writing as weak or empty verbs. For example, your sentence:

He knew she was going to be in a bad mood when she got home from work.

One ho-hum verb (knew) and four empty verbs (was, going, to be, got). How about we inject a little metaphor and some better verbs:

He knew she would roll in from work with her fuse hissing.

or maybe:

When she lumbered in from work, he knew the dinner menu would include him from the first growl.

Good verbs and metaphor are the life blood of good writing.